Seriously, please, for the love of all that is holy and profane, USE A COMMA WHEN A PERSON IS BEING ADDRESSED.
Please note the following:
1) “I know Stiles,” Derek huffed in annoyance.
2) “I know, Stiles,” Derek huffed in annoyance.
THESE ARE TWO COMPLETELY DIFFERENT LINES, ALL BECAUSE OF A COMMA.
In 1, Derek is telling someone he knows who Stiles is, he knows Stiles. He is probably annoyed because, “Duh, that’s the guy I bang; of course I know him.”
In 2, Derek is telling STILES that he knows something already. Stiles was probably all: “Derek, those dudes do NOT look friendly. I think we’re in deep shit.” To which Derek would likely roll his eyes and reply, “I know, Stiles.”
But anyway, do you see the difference?
If a person is being directly addressed, regardless of where it happens in the sentence, YOU ALWAYS SEPARATE THE NAME WITH AT LEAST ONE COMMA.
I will give you more examples! All of the following speech quotes contain examples:
"C’mon, Scott, just tell me if he smells aroused in my presence."
"Stiles, that’s disgusting."
"It’s totally reasonable! Back me up here, Lydia."
"Don’t drag me into this, boys."
"Lydia, baby, darling, light of my life, how could you betray me like this in my hour of need?"
"Hey, losers, what’s up?"
"Nothing, Cora! Nothing at all! Totally not creeping on your hot older—heeeeeeey, Derek. Didn’t see ya there."
LOOK AT ALL THESE EXAMPLES. Look how EASY it is!
So easy, anyone can do it! Even YOU! Why not GIVE IT A TRY!
PS: AND A NEW PARAGRAPH EACH TIME A DIFFERENT CHARACTER TALKS! You should NOT have more than one character speaking in the same paragraph.
I FIND BEING SCREAMED AT FOR ERRORS REALLY HELPFUL. I MEAN, THESE AREN’T ONES I USUALLY MAKE BUT I THINK BEING SCREAMED AT IN ALL CAPS IS EXTREMELY HELPFUL TO CORRECTING ERRORS MADE EITHER THROUGH A LACK OF FAMILIARITY WITH GRAMMAR RULES (ESPECIALLY ALL THOSE WRITING IN A SECOND LANGUAGE, DEFINITELY, THEY NEED THE CAPS AND BOLD TO UNDERSTAND YOUR POINT), OR THROUGH A TYPOGRAPHICAL ERROR.
PASSIVE AGGRESSIVE DEAR FANFIC AUTHOR POSTS ARE THE MOST USEFUL FORMS OF CRITICISM, I THINK.
Politics rambling ahead:
I am honestly unsurprised that there are riots and violence in Scotland right now. When the 1995 Quebec Referendum happened (read up here, here, here) there were similar reactions. The Quebec Referendum was, as a whole, rather more intense - it was based on some similar factors (culture and political control) but had the additional factors of stronger religious and language divides thrown in as well. The Quebec separatist movement had a bloodier leadup as well, with murders, kidnappins, and the implementation of martial law. The 1995 referendum was ultimately decided by less than 1%. Is it so surprising that shit it hitting the fan in Scotland now? Even though there was a wider margin, it was still close.
There is, however, hope for all the people who wish forr a more independent Scotland. As the Quebec referendum demonstrated, national governments aren’t blind. Scotland has put its cards on the table - now it’s time for England to pay up.
One of the things that you have to remember about Canadian culture is that 80% of it is just trying really hard to not be other countries, especially ones that have had a big influence on us.
Seriously. Most of Canadian culture is us going “We’re not American! Or British! Or French!”
Lioness Rampant, Tamora Pierce
And I swear, in that moment, we were all Alanna. DOES ANYBODY ACTUALLY KNOW HOW TO FLIRT?
SOMETIMES I GET SO FUCKING ANGRY WHEN I REMEMBER THAT I AM A GIRL BECAUSE MY MONEY HAS TO GO TO BUYING BRAS FOR THESE STUPID ORGANIC MILK BAGS AND PADS FOR MONTHLY UNWANTED SUBSCRIPTION OF LUCIFER’S WATERFALL LIKE WTF MAN WHY DONT THESE THINGS COME FREE WHEN MY UNWANTED PACKAGE IS GIVEN TO ME SERIOUSLY THO
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